Hi Vira,
I need to preface my comments here by saying that when I've been sleep-deprived and/or in a hurry, I've sent emails that I've later wished were more coherent and had fewer errors.
I would recommend that Katherine rewrite that paragraph for greater clarity and improved flow. If you want to translate the current version of that paragraph, yes it will probably sound awkward.
So, it's not just you.
Regards,