Hi Vira,
I need to preface my comments here by saying that when I've been
sleep-deprived and/or in a hurry, I've sent emails that I've later
wished were more coherent and had fewer errors.
I would recommend that Katherine rewrite that paragraph for greater
clarity and improved flow. If you want to translate the current
version of that paragraph, yes it will probably sound awkward.
So, it's not just you.
Regards,
Pine
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