Hi Stevie,
Thanks from me also for sharing this. Some points:
# The images you are using all appear to be copyright violations - not the best move! Why
not attribute the images, or link to where they're available on Commons or elsewhere?
For the image not covered by FoP, why not do something like the photos in
https://commons.wikimedia.org/wiki/Category:Censored_by_lack_of_FOP ?
# I'm never sure about how orphan works should relate to free licenses. I'm sure
that a number of my CC licensed photos could now be claimed by others to be orphan works
as people have taken them from Wikipedia and reused them without attribution. I'd
actually suggest removing this point completely unless you can explain how it might work
in this sort of case or better nuance the text here.
# "As can be seen in this article" won't work once you print the letter
out!
# What does it mean by 'on your group of MEPs'? Aren't you addressing them
individually with this? Are you meaning UK MEPs?
# If you want the MEPs to read through to the end, then I'd recommend condensing it
down to two sides (and print it double-sided) so that they only have to flip the page over
rather than flip through pages. Also, you only need the disclaimer on the first page
rather than all three.
# I still don't understand why 'start-ups' are mentioned here (as I asked at
https://wikimedia.org.uk/wiki/Talk:Free_Knowledge_Advocacy_Group_EU_stateme…
but with no reply).
# I agree with Fæ's points below.
Thanks,
Mike
On 14 Mar 2014, at 17:54, Fæ <faewik(a)gmail.com> wrote:
Thanks for letting people know that the UK chapter is
sending this letter.
It is a shame that so few Wikimedians in the UK have contributed to
the process, I think it is correct to say that even after counting
employees and trustees, the number is fewer than could be counted on
the fingers of one hand.
I am assuming that the UK charity is open to receiving feedback,
though your email here, nor your equivalent notice on the UK wiki does
not invite comment. My apologies if my assumption is unfounded, please
ignore the following points if that is the case.
Three points:
1.
I note that the letter appears to state that the Free Knowledge
Advocacy Group EU is a UK charity, it might be an idea to get the
prose slightly more specific.
2.
The lead paragraph states "We are the UK based charity that supports
and promotes Wikipedia and its sister websites such as Wikimedia
Commons". This is quite different from the WMUK Mission as recently
approved by the board of trustees which does not mention Wikipedia or
Commons. I suggest that in an official letter of this type, that the
charity is described as accurately as possible, even in a plain
English summary.
3.
Were I the recipient I would be unclear if in emailing back, I were
responding to the WMUK charity or the Free Knowledge Advocacy Group
EU. The Royal "we" used throughout the letter is more than a little
confusing as it is signed by the CEO of possibly either (or both) of
WMUK and the Advocacy Group and correspondence email is a different
personal address. Is the letter intended to be from the UK charity or
the group of organizations in the Advocacy Group?
Good luck with the letter. I'm sure that Jon Davies' practical
experience in the world of politics will prove useful if any MEP would
benefit from a follow-up, such as a discussion over lunch.
Fae
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