On Tue, Jan 17, 2012 at 7:31 AM, Happy Melon happy.melon.wiki@gmail.com wrote:
On 17 January 2012 15:23, Markus Krötzsch markus@semantic-mediawiki.orgwrote:
On 17/01/12 15:01, Daniel Barrett wrote:
As a writer, I believe the current message ("The Wikipedia community has
authorized...") is long and wordy and therefore not likely to be read by most users. I recommend shortening& simplifying it. Here's an example that removes 30+ words and preserves the meaning:
WE NEED YOU TO PROTECT FREE SPEECH ONLINE The English Wikipedia is "blacked out" for 24 hours to protest two bills
before the United States Congress, known as SOPA and PIPA. These bills endanger free speech in the United States and abroad, setting a frightening precedent of Internet censorship for the world.
Today we ask you to take action. [[Take action]] [[Learn more]]
+1
The first sentence is really too complicated.
Markus
+1 for the first sentence. The question of "authorised *who*?" is one that only serves to distract attention from the main message. I prefer the current wording of the legislation description: I don't think people will mind reading a few extra words there... it's not like they have anything else to read!! :-)
I like this wording better as well. If we want to discuss the authorization, the learn more link might be a better place to detail it.
That said, I'm sure this list is not the best place to discuss the banner wording. Where is?
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