On Fri, May 8, 2009 at 7:56 AM, Jussi-Ville Heiskanen cimonavaro@gmail.com wrote:
Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
geni wrote:
2009/5/5 wjhonson@aol.com:
-----Original Message----- From: FT2 ft2.wiki@gmail.com To: English Wikipedia wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
"The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock on!">>
Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."
Who, what, where, when, why, how? Fails to give location of war and result. Was the Delian League an empire or not? Discuss. Is it right to call the Pelopponnesian League "Spartan-led forces"? Should such a summary (for Twitterpedia) be just facts or some opinion as well?
Has anyone registered the domain name yet? :-)
Carcharoth