geni wrote: > 2009/5/5 <wjhonson(a)aol.com>om>: > > >> -----Original Message----- >> From: FT2 <ft2.wiki(a)gmail.com> >> To: English Wikipedia <wikien-l(a)lists.wikimedia.org> >> Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am >> Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win >> >> Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this: >> >> "The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between >> Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock >> on!">> >> >> --------------------- >> Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" >> Also "was" is much shorter than "took place" >> >> "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the >> Spartan-led Eponymous League." >> >> >> > "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led > Eponymous League." > > >