Carcharoth wrote:
On Fri, May 8, 2009 at 7:56 AM, Jussi-Ville Heiskanen cimonavaro@gmail.com wrote:
Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
geni wrote:
2009/5/5 wjhonson@aol.com:
-----Original Message----- From: FT2 ft2.wiki@gmail.com To: English Wikipedia wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
"The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock on!">>
Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."
Who, what, where, when, why, how? Fails to give location of war and result.
The result is not giveable. It was inconclusive at best, and genuinely not capsulisable.
Was the Delian League an empire or not? Discuss.
The Delian League doesn't deserve the name. You could just as justifiedly call a grouping of cats a herd, but people would just laugh at you.
Is it right to call the Pelopponnesian League "Spartan-led forces"?
I so posit.
Should such a summary (for Twitterpedia) be just facts or some opinion as well?
Not my remit.
Yours,
Jussi-Ville "This is SPARTA!!!" Heiskanen
Post Scriptum:
If I really wanted to criticize that one line summary of an epic event, the way would be to point out, just as Thucydides did in his final years, how intimately Persia was working in the scaffolding of the theater, as it were.