On 5/23/08, Thomas Dalton
<thomas.dalton(a)gmail.com> wrote:
You can have a neutral article that reads better
than many of ours,
though. Certainly we don't want to be using all kinds of fancy
literary devices - we want to just state the facts, but we can do that
without ending up with a sequence of disconnect sentences. A lot of
the problems come from the fact that articles are often written one
sentence at a time (after the initial creation, at least) - those
sentences need to be better integrated.
It's a feature of having lots of people edit that articles tend to
lack flow. There are very few editors who actually read a section of
an article before they edit it. People believe that a factoid is
missing, so they stick it in, regardless of what it does to the
structure of the paragraph. It means that every article needs someone
on hand to be endlessly copyediting it, which is a thankless task,
especially where it's a contentious topic, because then you're accused
of POV pushing if you move their factoid to retain flow.
Couldn't agree more. Regrettably, I don't have a solution, though...