SlimVirgin wrote:
On 5/23/08, Charles Matthews
<charles.r.matthews(a)ntlworld.com> wrote:
I'm a bit alarmed about the references in
this thread to newspaper
journalism techniques. Do recall, everyone, that such articles are
recycled, in most cases in 24 hours.
I'm not sure I see the difference. For example, the earlier point
about cutlines/captions applies to any publication that uses them. Of
the points raised today, which ones do you feel apply only to
newspapers?
Let's look at a concrete example: [[Alexander Cordell]]. Do we really
need the journalists' technique here: "Son of the Empire"; "In Love
with
Wales"; "Evocative Writing"? That's like a certain style of newspaper
writing. But not right for WP tone, I believe.
We should
concentrate, mainly, on having articles well organised, so
that people can find the information they want. Once that's done,
improving readability is an essentially trivial copy-editing function.
Copy editing isn't that easy, Charles. I know we have a few editors
who make it look easy, but that's because they're very good at it. For
most of us, it can be a struggle.
OK, go back to the quote at the start of the thread:
"Ahab seeks one specific whale, Moby-Dick, a great white whale of
tremendous size and ferocity. Comparatively few whaling ships know of
Moby-Dick, and fewer yet have knowingly encountered the whale. In a
previous encounter, the whale destroyed Ahab’s boat and bit off Ahab’s
leg. Ahab intends to exact revenge on the whale."
How hard is it to do this?
"Ahab seeks one particular whale, Moby-Dick: a great white whale, of
tremendous size and ferocity. Few whalers know of Moby-Dick, and fewer
yet have knowingly encountered it. In a previous meeting, the whale
destroyed Ahab’s boat and bit off his leg. Ahab intends to exact revenge."
That removes some redundancy, punctuates, watches the choice of words.
And the end result is _not bad_. As a one para explanation of the book's
main plot, it is really OK. Do we have to have the stuff about a
traumatised psyche trying to restage the confrontation with the Other?
Well, we could, given a reliable source. But anyway, this kind of copy
editing can be regarded as routine.
Charles