Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
geni wrote:
2009/5/5 wjhonson@aol.com:
-----Original Message----- From: FT2 ft2.wiki@gmail.com To: English Wikipedia wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
"The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock on!">>
Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."
Yours,
Jussi-Ville "This is SPARTA!!!" Heiskanen
On Fri, May 8, 2009 at 7:56 AM, Jussi-Ville Heiskanen cimonavaro@gmail.com wrote:
Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
geni wrote:
2009/5/5 wjhonson@aol.com:
-----Original Message----- From: FT2 ft2.wiki@gmail.com To: English Wikipedia wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
"The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock on!">>
Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."
Who, what, where, when, why, how? Fails to give location of war and result. Was the Delian League an empire or not? Discuss. Is it right to call the Pelopponnesian League "Spartan-led forces"? Should such a summary (for Twitterpedia) be just facts or some opinion as well?
Has anyone registered the domain name yet? :-)
Carcharoth
Carcharoth wrote:
On Fri, May 8, 2009 at 7:56 AM, Jussi-Ville Heiskanen cimonavaro@gmail.com wrote:
Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
geni wrote:
2009/5/5 wjhonson@aol.com:
-----Original Message----- From: FT2 ft2.wiki@gmail.com To: English Wikipedia wikien-l@lists.wikimedia.org Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
"The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock on!">>
Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ? And remove "The" Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led Eponymous League."
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."
Who, what, where, when, why, how? Fails to give location of war and result.
The result is not giveable. It was inconclusive at best, and genuinely not capsulisable.
Was the Delian League an empire or not? Discuss.
The Delian League doesn't deserve the name. You could just as justifiedly call a grouping of cats a herd, but people would just laugh at you.
Is it right to call the Pelopponnesian League "Spartan-led forces"?
I so posit.
Should such a summary (for Twitterpedia) be just facts or some opinion as well?
Not my remit.
Yours,
Jussi-Ville "This is SPARTA!!!" Heiskanen
Post Scriptum:
If I really wanted to criticize that one line summary of an epic event, the way would be to point out, just as Thucydides did in his final years, how intimately Persia was working in the scaffolding of the theater, as it were.
On Fri, May 8, 2009 at 8:17 AM, Jussi-Ville Heiskanen cimonavaro@gmail.com wrote:
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Post Scriptum:
If I really wanted to criticize that one line summary of an epic event, the way would be to point out, just as Thucydides did in his final years, how intimately Persia was working in the scaffolding of the theater, as it were.
"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC): epoch-defining war between Greek city states, fomented by Persia."?
Twitterpedia might find a niche for a *range* of different one-line summaries of events, where it is the differences between the summaries that help bring out key points.
Carcharoth
Carcharoth wrote:
Twitterpedia might find a niche for a *range* of different one-line summaries of events, where it is the differences between the summaries that help bring out key points.
Turning this round, there would be considerable point in having a graduated range of ledes to WP articles: character-limited; aimed at different levels of expertise; jargon-free; "This will not make much sense unless you are familiar with X and Y"; and so on.
Charles