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James Alexander
Community Advocacy
Wikimedia Foundation
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On Wed, Aug 5, 2015 at 5:56 PM, Joe Sutherland <jsutherland(a)wikimedia.org
wrote:
Hey all,
We just published "News on Wikipedia: Beijing wins Winter Olympics, MH370
wreckage recovered, and more" to the Wikimedia blog. URL:
https://blog.wikimedia.org/2015/08/05/beijing-olympics-mh370-wreckage/
We plan to send out five pieces of social for this story, spread through
the next *three days* (or thereabouts) to keep things timely.
Please do comment for tone.
*Twitter:*
• China's capital Beijing will host the 2022 Winter Olympics.
#NewsOnWikipedia
LGTM
[Sidenote - this is going to make the mental disambiguation of saying
"Beijing Olympics" in my head really annoying]
• Barack Obama (@potus) announced his Clean Power Plan
this week.
#cleanpower #NewsOnWikipedia
LGTM
• Wreckage found on French island Réunion is from
missing plane #MH370.
#NewsOnWikipedia
Perhaps "French territory *of *Réunion" ? That sounds better to me but I'm
not actually sure if it's more correct/better. You'll know the grammar side
better then I :). Otherwise LGTM
• Zimbabwe have requested the extradition of an
American hunter for
#Cecil's killing. #NewsOnWikipedia
• Secretive Taliban leader Mohammed Omar actually died in 2013.
#NewsOnWikipedia
Both LGTM
*Facebook/G+:*
• Beijing beat out Almaty of Kazakhstan to become the host city for the
2022 Winter Olympics this week. #NewsOnWikipedia
Hmmmm.... I'm torn between "Almaty of Kazakhstan" (which sounds awesome but
kinda sounds like an aristocratic name to me) and "Almaty, Kazakhstan".
Happy with either, otherwise LGTM
• Barack Obama unveiled his Clean Power Plan this week. #NewsOnWikipedia
LGTM
• Plane parts found on the French territory Réunion were this week
> confirmed as from missing Malaysia Airlines Flight 370. #NewsOnWikipedia
Same "of" question as above, otherwise LGTM
• Zimbabwe last week requested the extradition of American hunter Walter
> Palmer following the killing of Cecil the lion. #NewsOnWikipedia
perhaps "f*ormally* requested the extradition" ? (I'm not actually sure
that's true but I think it is? Just thinking that's different then some of
the random statements they mentioned about wanting extradition earlier).
Otherwise LGTM
> • Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed Omar.
> This week it was confirmed that he died two years ago. #NewsOnWikipedia
Hmm, I'm happy with this one (I like the images fact) but worry that it
could feel like a bit of a non sequitur. Perhaps tying it together with
something like:
- Currently, only two images exist of former Taliban leader Mohammed
Omar. *It's likely to stay that way unless more are found because t*his
week it was confirmed that he died two years ago. #NewsOnWikipedia
best,
> Joe
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