[WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win

[Jussi-Ville Heiskanen]

Jussi-Ville Heiskanen wrote:
> geni wrote:
>> 2009/5/5  <wjhonson at aol.com>:
>>   
>>> -----Original Message-----
>>> From: FT2 <ft2.wiki at gmail.com>
>>> To: English Wikipedia <wikien-l at lists.wikimedia.org>
>>> Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am
>>> Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
>>>
>>> Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
>>>
>>> "The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between
>>> Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock
>>> on!">>
>>>
>>> ---------------------
>>> Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ?  And remove "The"
>>> Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
>>>
>>> "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the
>>> Spartan-led Eponymous League."
>>>
>>>     
>>
>> "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led
>> Eponymous League."
>>
>>   
>

"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athenian empire vs. Spartan-led forces."


Yours,

Jussi-Ville "This is SPARTA!!!" Heiskanen