[WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win

[geni]

2009/5/5  <wjhonson at aol.com>:
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> From: FT2 <ft2.wiki at gmail.com>
> To: English Wikipedia <wikien-l at lists.wikimedia.org>
> Sent: Tue, 5 May 2009 12:35 am
> Subject: Re: [WikiEN-l] Twitterpedia will win
>
> Redundant text - "the X war was a war" duh :) Try this:
>
> "The Peloponnesian War (Ancient Greece, 431-404BC), took place between
> Athens and its empire, against the Eponymous League led by Sparta. Rock
> on!">>
>
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> Why do you have to state "Ancient Greece" ?  And remove "The"
> Also "was" is much shorter than "took place"
>
> "Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire, against the
> Spartan-led Eponymous League."
>

"Peloponnesian War (431-404BC), Athens and its empire vs Spartan-led
Eponymous League."

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geni