After some feedback from the blog folks I have an updated draft to share. Please take a look and provide any corrections. I think it tells the bigger story of changes coming to production, and explains our research quite well (not the other way around!).
I simplified the language, made it about 100 words shorter, put the big news at the top, and removed passive voice and adverbs.
https://meta.wikimedia.org/wiki/User:CKoerner_(WMF)/Work/A-B_Test_Results_1
Here's a diff https://meta.wikimedia.org/w/index.php?title=User%3ACKoerner_%28WMF%29%2FWork%2FA-B_Test_Results_1&type=revision&diff=15333867&oldid=15327844 of my slew of changes.