[WikiEN-l] Re: help me

[phil hunt]

On Wed, 19 May 2004 23:57:18 -0500, Sheldon Rampton <sheldon.rampton at verizon.net> wrote:
>
>The difference between [[XFree86]] and [[XFree86 logfile]] is that 
>[[XFree86]] really *is* an "encyclopedia" article. It begins with a 
>lead paragraph that explains, even to a relative novice, what XFree86 
>is: "an open source implementation of the X Window System.." By 
>contrast, [[XFree86 logfile]] begins as follows:
>
>>When XFree86 starts, it creates a logfile which contains information 
>>about what happened when XFree86 started. It contains information 
>>about what modules were loaded, which color depth that is used etc. 
>>The file is especially useful when something goes awry, as reading 
>>it can help you find exactly what went wrong.
>
>This reads like a technical manual, not an encyclopedia. As a lead 
>paragraph, it leaves something to be desired. 

I've added a new lead sentence, which I think is an improvement.


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