[WikiEN-l] Fixing "many people regard..."
Daniel Mayer
maveric149 at yahoo.com
Mon Jan 19 00:29:16 UTC 2004
Daniel P.B.Smith wrote:
>For example, "some people regard the situation in Iraq as a guerrilla
>war" can be replaced with "Army Gen. John P. Abizaid said that forces
>in Iraq were 'conducting what I would describe as a classical
>guerrilla-type campaign against us.'"
Being so specific doesn't work in a lead paragraph and different high-ranking
people have a multitude of POVs that are very often not representative of the
population in general.
-- mav
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