On 17 January 2012 15:23, Markus Krötzsch <markus(a)semantic-mediawiki.org>wrote;wrote:
On 17/01/12 15:01, Daniel Barrett wrote:
As a writer, I believe the current message ("The Wikipedia community has
authorized...") is long and wordy and therefore not likely to be read by
most users. I recommend shortening& simplifying it. Here's an example that
removes 30+ words and preserves the meaning:
WE NEED YOU TO PROTECT FREE SPEECH ONLINE
The English Wikipedia is "blacked out" for 24 hours to protest two bills
before the United States Congress, known as SOPA and PIPA. These bills
endanger free speech in the United States and abroad, setting a frightening
precedent of Internet censorship for the world.
Today we ask you to take action.
[[Take action]] [[Learn more]]
+1
The first sentence is really too complicated.
Markus
+1 for the first sentence. The question of "authorised *who*?" is one that
only serves to distract attention from the main message. I prefer the
current wording of the legislation description: I don't think people will
mind reading a few extra words there... it's not like they have anything
else to read!! :-)
That said, I'm sure this list is not the best place to discuss the banner
wording. Where is?
--HM