Good point - LGTM now.

Joe

On 15 November 2014 16:02, Tilman Bayer <tbayer@wikimedia.org> wrote:


On Sat, Nov 15, 2014 at 5:14 AM, Joe Sutherland <jsutherland@wikimedia.org> wrote:


On 15 November 2014 03:04, Tilman Bayer <tbayer@wikimedia.org> wrote:
On Fri, Nov 14, 2014 at 6:57 PM, Michael Guss <mguss@wikimedia.org> wrote:
> Hello everyone,
>
> Here is the proposed social media for "Browsing Wikipedia While Sailing The
> South Pacific: The Goodall Family's Experience Offline Browsing" blog post.
>
> Blog post:
> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>
> t: No Wi-Fi? No problem. A family at sea tells us what it's like to use
> #OfflineWikipedia:
>
> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>
Refining a bit to add some exotism ;) and to include the Kiwix Twitter handle:

No Wi-Fi? No problem. A family sailing the South Pacific tells us how
they use #OfflineWikipedia:
https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
@KiwixOffline


> f/g: The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi
> access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #kiwix the
> offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from culture to
> the fish they'd like to eat for dinner.
> https://blog.wikimedia.org/2014/11/14/sailing-south-pacific-with-wikipedia-on-board-goodall-family/
>
Tweaked:

The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi
access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix,
the offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from
culture to the fish they'd like to eat for dinner.

This reads quite oddly (possibly because "culture" is a far shorter clause than "fish they'd like to eat for dinner". How's this:

The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix, the offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from exotic cultures to the fish they'd like for dinner.

Good point about "culture". But I don't really see where the post talks about exotic cultures among its examples, so I would modify further:

The Goodall family spends most of their time at sea. Without Wi-Fi access, traveling to foreign lands can be daunting. But with #Kiwix, the offline Wikipedia software, the family looks up everything from Greek mythology to the fish they'd like for dinner.

 
 

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