Thanks Joe, thoughts inline

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On Tue, Sep 22, 2015 at 5:54 PM, Joe Sutherland <jsutherland@wikimedia.org> wrote:
Hey all,

We today published "News on Wikipedia: Japan shocks the rugby world, an earthquake strikes Chile, and more" to the Wikimedia blog. URL: 


We plan to send out five pieces of social for this story, spread through the rest of the week to keep things timely.

Please do comment for tone.

Twitter:

• Greece just had their second general election in nine months. #NewsOnWikipedia

hmm, this works but I wonder about a bit more of an active voice? (I think I'm using that phrase correctly...) such as:

"Greece finishes their second general election in nine months. #NewsOnWikipedia" think it flows better then "just had"
 
• Japan's military now has powers it hasn't had since World War II. #NewsOnWikipedia

LGTM, other thoughts:
  • Japan interprets it's constitution to allow it to enter foreign conflicts to attack in self-defense.  #NewsOnWikipedia
  • Japan's military gains powers it hasn't had since World War II. #NewsOnWikipedia
• A magnitude 8.3 earthquake struck off the coast of Chile last week. #NewsOnWikipedia

LGTM
 
• Burkina Faso experienced its second major political uprising in two years. #NewsOnWikipedia

Perhaps experiences? (rather then experienced) LGTM with either
 
• Japan won its first Rugby World Cup game since 1991... against the Springboks. #NewsOnWikipedia

Springboks is such a great word... how can you NOT want to figure out what the hell that is when you read it... [/me had to google before responding]
 
Facebook/G+:

• Greece just held its third national vote of the year... #NewsOnWikipedia

LGTM, same slight comment as above.
 
• Japan has promoted legislation allowing it to fight in foreign conflicts for the first time since World War II. #NewsOnWikipedia
LGTM 
• An earthquake off the coast of Chile was felt in São Paulo — more than 1,600 miles away. #NewsOnWikipedia

LGTM

• Last year, a populist movement overthrew the President of Burkina Faso. Last week, the new President was overthrown in a coup d'état. #NewsOnWikipedia

Like this, LGTM
 
• Teams South Africa has lost to in a Rugby World Cup: England, New Zealand, Australia ... and now Japan. #NewsOnWikipedia

Are these the only teams they've ever lost too? Perhaps adding Only somewhere? "The only teams South Africa has lost to during a Rugby World Cup: ...." 

 
best,
Joe

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Joe Sutherland
Communications Intern [remote]

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