One comment on your draft, is that the langugage makes it a bit unclear for the average reader if/that the imbalance in England was because the males left the country and/or were killed in overseas wars. It's implied but not sufficiently explicit so some people might get confused.

Yep absolutely. In fact we kinda threw the text together in the last hour of the editathon so there was something to show. There were three of us discussing the topic; a female academic (no wiki experience), mcsony (minimal wiki experience) and me (over the hill). It was a fun mix because I'm OK at writing & have interest in history, Rosemary knew the topic and mcsony has a background in economics and statistics that applied very well.

Also, the topic of surplus males is probably more timely today and I've thought about writing an article about it, so this certainly is relevant.

That would be very interesting!

So this is quite a big topic - though I'm not sure if it calls for one article called "Surplus males or females" or "Surplus gender demographics" or whatever the experts call the broader topic.

I'd say there is sufficiently diverse material here for two articles. Because the reasons, dates and outcomes of the two topics are substantially different. That said there may be legs in writing a top-top level article about societal imbalances in history.

Thanks for all the feedback and edits!

Tom